Center Cosmetic Surgery
can yo check my grammar?
Beauty is in the eye of beholder is an unknown proverb in contemporary society. It is only a simple sentence that does not make any sense anymore. Some women think social interaction and personal success are dependent on physical attraction. Being perfect is a common issue, but when this issue becomes obsession it can become a more serious mental illness. Plastic surgery is a huge obsession among all people including preteens, teenagers, and adolescents. It is an obsession that is fed by models and celebrities who think nothing of going under the scalpel again and again in an elusive chase after a beauty icon that doesn’t exist. Plastic surgery is not without risk. It is not healthy way to look perfect. Plastic surgery can affect person physical, socially and mentally. Plastic surgery can also have many side effects. It is painful procedure that can even lead to death. A young mother, Dehlmalyz Rios, was 26 years old when she decided to have plastic surgery. Two days after the surgery her body rejected the fat that was deposited in her calves. She died by leaving two children. It can ruin lives as well. Some side effects are permanent such as physical pain. Plastic surgery includes cutting, bending, stretching and other method to manipulate body structure in order to get desired shape. This causes pain, discomfort, and swelling that may remain for a lifetime. Plastic surgery can cause depression brought on by medication used to control the after affects of surgery. Of course there is always the post-surgical risk of pneumonia from having to remain in bed for long periods of time or of forced inactivity. Sometimes there are emotional traumas from the surgery not having the desired affect, or the person’s refusal to accept the modifications. There can also be guilt or bad feelings caused by spouses, relatives, or friends. Cosmetic surgery is depends a great deal on the doctor’s qualifications. There are doctors who offer surgery at very low prices who are not skilled or qualified to perform plastic surgery. Most of these doctors are untrained except for a seminar in hotel for a few hours. Credentials aren’t checked so that people who may not even be doctors are allowed to take the seminar. In Miami, a doctor named Reinaldo Slivestre, practiced surgery in a small office. He had very little medical training. One of his patients, named Alexandra Baez, claimed that he gave him breast implants instead of the pectoral muscle implant that he had requested. Many doctors who are performing plastic surgery are not licensed by the American Board of Plastic Surgeons. They are quacks; get rich quick surgeons, performing as many surgeries as they can under less than sterile conditions. Cosmetic surgery is not for everyone. This doesn’t prevent people from seeking it. Plastic surgery costs thousands of dollars and usually requires a lot of recovery time. Some people sacrifice their basic needs to save enough money for plastic surgery. There are those who say that plastic surgery should not be used to just change someone’s appearance for the sake of vanity. Sometimes plastic surgery taken to the extreme can make someone look less than human, as is the case with Michael Jackson. People make fun of him, but he is wealthy enough that it doesn’t affect his life. But what about the person who was not wealthy or a celebrity and the surgery go wrong? The surgeon may say they are sorry, but they can just walk away. The patient has to live with the awful results. But whether the surgical effects are deemed a success or failure, both the surgeon and the patient are responsible for one requested
Public Comments
- it's not bad
- First, quotes around "Beauty is in the eye of the beholder." Now I'm exhausted. But there's a start. Good luck. It's pretty good from what I've read so far.
- I'll look it over quickly. I saw verb-tense arguments, and you need to use better qualifiers. Sometimes you are qualifying too much. If you can say it in one word, there's no need for a list of descriptors. You should use more compound sentences. For example, combine these sentences "Plastic surgery is not without risk. It is not healthy way to look perfect." This can be one sentence, and it would be more effective. There are many instances where a compound sentence would add fluidity to your paper. "They are quacks" We know who they are, but what is a quack? You define a get rich surgeon, but what is a quack? It's unnecessary and both "they" and the the term "quack" only adds weakness to your paper. Avoid starting a sentence with a conjunction like "But." Only really good writers get away with that, and until your style is supported with excellent grammar, you should avoid that error. Well done, but it needs polishing. Sorry I don't have time to look it over in more detail.
